Team Communication Tone Calibrator

Prompt

Rewrite this workplace communication to hit the right tone for my situation.

Communication type: [SLACK MESSAGE / EMAIL / MEMO / COMMENT IN DOC / PERFORMANCE FEEDBACK]
Audience: [WHO WILL READ THIS — e.g. my manager's manager, a peer, a direct report, a client]
Situation sensitivity: [LOW / MEDIUM / HIGH]
Desired outcome: [WHAT YOU WANT THEM TO FEEL OR DO AFTER READING]
Current tone problem: [WHAT'S WRONG WITH MY DRAFT — e.g. too aggressive, too apologetic, too vague, too long]

My draft:
[PASTE YOUR DRAFT]

Please provide:
1. **Rewritten version** (calibrated for the audience and situation)
2. **What changed** (3-4 bullet notes on key changes and why)
3. **Tone check** — on a scale of 1-10 (1=too soft, 10=too harsh), where is my original vs. the rewrite?
4. **Alternative version** if there's a meaningfully different approach worth considering
5. One phrase from my draft I should never use with this audience